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Still trying to kick-start the brain.

halo: three words: exist, arch and breathe. drabble. get the words coming.
kim: oh... i dunno if i can do a drabble that way. i can try.
kim: you too, same words.
halo: okay :-)

Death warning. If that's a problem, please don't read it.



You don't exist any more. You're nothing more than thoughts, memories; flashes of pain, laughter, tears and joy rolled into mental pictures. You remember being there, being held, touched with reverence, with love. You remember his fingertips tracing your face.

You remember the pain etched into his features, saw his tears hit skin that couldn't feel any longer.

"Breathe, Chris, c'mon, please—" Frantic whisper.

You watched abstractly as the rain mingled with your blood, muting the color. Erasing you.

You watched your back arch when they zapped you, trying to restart your heart.

You hope he believes in ghosts.

Date: 2003-05-13 05:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] without-me.livejournal.com
Oh, holy...

Wow. Just, wow. If you'd asked me if I thought that topic could be covered--successfully--in a drabble, I'd've said no.

I'd've been wrong. You are amazing.

Date: 2003-05-13 05:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
*blush* Thank you, honey. *hugs tight and smooches*

You say the nicest things. :) And honestly--I didn't intend to write that...it just kinda. Was there. The first line just was there and wouldn't go away. Thanks for reading it, tho'... I know that's not a comfortable topic. *hugs again*

Date: 2003-05-13 05:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] without-me.livejournal.com
Heh. Oh, I'm a big ol' freak; I lurrrrrve good deathfic. It's hard to find (the good stuff, that is). But yeah, baby.

Date: 2003-05-13 05:46 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] ex_halo669
::sniffles::

hurts so good, honey. it's painful, but beautiful all at once.

and you know JC believes in ghosts. as does Chris :)

Date: 2003-05-13 06:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
and you know JC believes in ghosts. as does Chris :)

Yes, they do :) *hugs tight* Thank you :)

Date: 2003-05-13 06:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icebun.livejournal.com
Oh good lord, that's amazing.

You got me all sniffly. Beautiful stuff.

Date: 2003-05-13 06:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
*pets and hands a tissue*

Thank you, honey :)

Date: 2003-05-13 06:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] clumsygyrl.livejournal.com
i'm a lurker. i'm a lurker.

but wow. that was so beautiful. wonderful job. i had no idea how much you could say with a drabble... i'm astounded.

Date: 2003-05-13 06:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
*beams* Thank you :) I'm so glad you liked it--and took the time to let me know!

Re:

Date: 2003-05-13 06:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] clumsygyrl.livejournal.com
You're welcome! =)

Always time to praise good TrickC. hehe

Date: 2003-05-13 10:05 pm (UTC)
jic: Daniel Jackson (SG1) firing weapon, caption "skill to do comes of doing" (JC with the best hair)
From: [personal profile] jic
*whimper* Very good.

Date: 2003-05-14 06:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
Thanks, hon :) Glad you liked it :)

Date: 2003-05-13 10:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] babygotbass.livejournal.com
Chills. From a drabble. Now, there is something that doesn't happen everyday.

Wow.

-- Erin

Date: 2003-05-14 06:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
*beams* Thank you! I'm glad it had such an effect. (And kind of amazed, too, honestly.) Thanks for letting me know :)

Date: 2003-05-14 05:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] splifford.livejournal.com
i am a big puddle of despair now. that was so sad. but beautiful...and in my head i am absolutely adding a few extra lines about miraculous recovery and happy, smutty reunions, because i can't *handle* death fics at all...even in drabble.

Date: 2003-05-14 06:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
*hugs tight*

I did a...followup? sequel? something. Not sure it's exactly what you had in mind, but. Yes :) And thanks for reading, honey, *especially* if it's not your cuppa. *cuddles splifford*

Re:

Date: 2003-05-14 07:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] splifford.livejournal.com
::snuggle::

thanks, baby...i read the followup and it's close enough for folk. :-)

as long as death isn't the end, then i'm ok. and in my world, death is never the end.

Date: 2003-05-14 06:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] su-perisi.livejournal.com
meeeeeeeeeeeeep!!! Can I call you queen of drabbles? Because you sooo are. Even if its not-so-happy.

Date: 2003-05-14 06:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mickeym.livejournal.com
*blush* Thank you :) *hugs* There's a kinda-sorta happy follow-up to this one :)

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