Well what you wrote first was perfect as far as tenses go. It was past tense as you used words to convey that things happened in the past because you are describing a thought process or internal narration which is very similar to dialog. You are not describing action in a scene which is when the switching of tenses is problematic.
The thing I have more of an issue with is something liked this:
Jared pulls the door open that leads to the offices of the casting director. Jared walks down the same hallway that he did the first time he was here to read for the part. Jared saw that a light was on in the office and he stepped into the doorway to see Jensen there as well.
Notice that I started in present tense but then switched to past tense which is not proper. Either you stay in one tense or the other for this kind of thing.
To remain consistant and be proper, my last part should have read:
Jared sees that a light is on in the office and he steps into the doorway to see Jensen there as well.
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Date: 2007-12-31 11:40 pm (UTC)The thing I have more of an issue with is something liked this:
Jared pulls the door open that leads to the offices of the casting director. Jared walks down the same hallway that he did the first time he was here to read for the part. Jared saw that a light was on in the office and he stepped into the doorway to see Jensen there as well.
Notice that I started in present tense but then switched to past tense which is not proper. Either you stay in one tense or the other for this kind of thing.
To remain consistant and be proper, my last part should have read:
Jared sees that a light is on in the office and he steps into the doorway to see Jensen there as well.