spn fic rec

[mickeym]

We Meet Face To Face To Face, by cormallen. Sam/Dean, NC-17, D/s.

This is NOT a story that trivializes or fetishizes D/s. It's not meant to titilate. It's one brother giving the other something the other probably isn't even consciously aware that he needs. It deals with Dean's issues of needing the control John exercised over both his sons -- needing a father figure (though please don't read that as Dean needing sex with John, because that's really not at all what this story is about). cormallen writes the boys as fucked up, with huge issues that stand around and keep them company, and it comes across so raw and intense it'll take your breath away.

Snippet: Dean is pushing him. Prodding him, working him up; it means what he's doing isn't enough. Dean wants more, needs more than just kneeling on the floor and paying obeisance to Sam's spread thighs.

Comments

[darkseaglass.livejournal.com]

You only use present tense within dialog or if the story is being narrated from someones POV.

This is not true. Charles Dickens' Bleak House, for instance, is written with half the narrative in 1st person past, the other half in 3rd person present. Coetzee's Disgrace is also 3rd person present.

There really are no hard and fast rules here, I choose tense and POV based on situation, motive, and desired effect. I don't think I'm alone in this, as I've heard the same from others.

[deansdemongirl.livejournal.com]

This is not true. Charles Dickens' Bleak House, for instance, is written with half the narrative in 1st person past, the other half in 3rd person present. Coetzee's Disgrace is also 3rd person present.

And they remained consistant when a specific tense was being used right. They didn't write a sentence or paragraph in one tense and half in another right? Also as you say they are doing narrative or writing from a constant specific point of view. narration is bascally internal dialog or is a story being told from the character's point of view and they are doing the describing or telling of the story rather than the author telling the story about the characters.

Nothing looked liked this did it?.

Dean pulled the car to a stop and he gets out. Sam gathered up his computer and steps out of the car as well. Both brothers looked around and they see that people are acting strange. They go to the nearest person and asked them what is happening.

That is the kind of constant switch of tense within a sentance or paragraph that bothers me. It doesn't read right. Especially when it is the author telling us a story about the characters and things that happened to them in the story.

[darkseaglass.livejournal.com]

It looks like I misunderstood you. When you said "You only use present tense within dialog or if the story is being narrated from someones POV," I read that as a blanket statement on your part re: how an Author should approach all writing.

If you were saying that this author 'should only use present tense within dialog or if the story is being narrated from someone's POV' then I misunderstood you.